Synopsis and Film noir treatment for my individual film noir

Synopsis
A man who was supposed to be involved in a bank robbery with his friend decides to give up on his friends half way through the robbery and leaves them there. Two of his friends get caught and end up in jail while one of his friends managed to escape and now the friend is searching for him to get his revenge of the man changing his mind. The man ends up going to a different state far away from his friend so he thinks. The man meets a woman who persuades him to turn himself in but what the man doesn’t know is that this woman is working for his friend so that his friend can catch him and end up killing him. At the end his friend ends up in jail for attempted murder towards him but the man does not end up in jail as there is no proof that he was in this bank robbery.
Synopsis for opening of film noir
The beginning shows a man in a room sitting on the bed drinking some whisky then you hear his voice over ‘Why did I have to walk out I could be so much happier if I had stayed’. Then you hear police sirens for about five seconds. He stands up and stares at himself in the mirror. When a beautiful woman walks in and tells him ‘Turn yourself in you have no life here wouldn’t you better off in your own state I do the police even no you did it. Then shot back to the man looking depressed and then the Venetian blind effect on him.
Editing
In the beginning this movie starts half way through so you think about what is this man depressed about and what is the woman talking about.
Cinematography
The Venetian blind effect goes across the man when he is staring at himself in the mirror. Many of the shots i will be using will be medium or extreme close ups to show the depression of this man. But the only two different shot that i would use is when we first see him we open to a wide shot so we know where he is then when the woman walks into the room to show her dominance across this room and him.
M-E-S
The location I plan is in a hotel room the only light you have is coming from the window. A prop is the glass of scotch because we can see that he is worrying about something. The mirror as well is a prop because when he looks at himself it shows his depression.
Sound
In this movie you have a voice over of what the man is thinking also after you have heard his thinking you hear police sirens. In the very beginning when you see the man sitting on the bed cars down on the street so you know that you are in a big city.

I choose this storyline because it is like a typical film noir storyline, for instance someone running away from the problems then also there is a femfatale which is in most film noirs.